See, this is a type of writing I don’t care for at all. It feels like someone who is very self conscious of trying to be a good writer. It doesn’t feel natural at all - a bit forced tbh.
(I’m not a big reader at all - hadn’t read fiction in 5 1/2 years until last month - and I find the actual process of reading to be painful. Scars from an English degree, trudging my way through books I didn’t care for and constantly calculating percentages of pages read to force myself through them, and being surrounded by people who thought ‘reading’ was this hyper arcane hobby that made them quirky and special. But still. I find it much easier to read simply written novels that focus on plot than writers with lofty ambitions and not much plot.)